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7th February 2010
Mrs M. Cairns
Campus Recruiter
Bloomberg L.P
23 Church Street
Capital Square
Singapore 049481
Dear Mrs. Cairns,
Professional Analytics Representative, Job Reference No. 24185
I am enclosing my resume in response to your advertisement for the above post which appeared in The Straits Times on 5th February 2010.
I am currently a final year student from the National University of Singapore, pursuing a Bachelor’s degree in Science with specialization in Statistics and Applied Probability. I have acquired a wide range of IT and finance-related skills during my three years there. As a Statistics major, I have experience in calculating numerical data and analyzing it, summarizing information and writing reports. I am also skilled in applying statistical software including R, SAS and SPSS for data analysis and forecasting.
While pursuing my studies, I worked as an intern at Winston Engineering. I was posted to the accounting department, where I organized files and verified financial accounts. In addition, I worked as a sales assistant during vacations. Handling customers and cashiering allowed me to interact with people at different levels. I learnt to be customer focused by anticipating their needs. As a sea scout, I had to organize a camp for students. Planning the event as a team leader taught me how to work effectively and efficiently as a group. I also gained strong interpersonal skills from my interaction with the camp participants.
In review of your company’s objectives and possible openings, I believe that I am qualified to meet your current needs. As a fast leaner with an innate curiosity for financial structures, I would find the post of Professional Analytics Representative very challenging and fulfilling. I look forward to an opportunity to be part of the Bloomberg Professional Service, and I hope you will look favorably at my application. I can be reached in confidence at one of the above telephone numbers and look forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Lee Shi-Chen Gwen
7 comments:
Hi Gwen.
Your application letter is short and sweet.
I especially like how you have made the divisions of introduction, your educational qualifications, your skills that tie in with their requirements and the conclusion very clear.
However, there is a small typo: As a fast learner….
I felt the ending was a bit bombastic. You could have personalized it a bit and made it sound friendlier, like you are inviting an interview. But maybe this is just formal phrasing. Anyway good job!
See you in class.
Divya:)
Hi Gwen,
I do agree with Div that your letter is indeed concise and neat.
I am just thinking it will be good if you can also back up your wide range of software skills with some concrete assignments or projects which you have done before in NUS. This will highlight your technical knowledge more significantly.
Also, I feel that perhaps you can try to link back some of the transferable skill sets which you have picked up during your vacation jobs/internships to this Bloomberg position which you are applying to.
One last personal peeve from me in your last paragraph (maybe it's just me); I find it a bit weird when you mentioned that you are a fast learner and yet you found the post challenging. Maybe you will want to change it to "avid learner"?
Ganbatte kudasai.
Gwen, hello!
There may be a typo in this sentence: I have acquired a wide range of IT and finance-related skills during my three years THERE --> I have acquired a wide range of IT and finance-related skills during my three years HERE.
Also, in this sentence "..I would find the post of Professional Analytics Representative very challenging and fulfilling.." Do you find the challenging aspect of the job fulfilling? If so you may want to change the sentence to ".. post of Professional Analytics Representative very challenging and HENCE fulfilling.." And in this case, you may want to mention that you like new challenges in your third para; just to link the two together. Oh, and remove the word "very from this". This may give the reader that you may not be up for it.
But otherwise, just as Div and Kenny pointed out, your letter is short, sweet and to the point. Good job =)
*oh, and div, you used the word "bombastic" =p
Hi Gwen,
Thanks for your comments on my application letter!
I agree with Div that your letter was short but sweet.Its concise and to the point.
However, I think your application letter can be more personalised as I feel that some points have been stated in your resume already. For example,you can elaborate like "organized files and verified financial accounts"... so..
Anw,good job!
Cheers,
Serene
Hi Gwen,
Thanks for your comments on my application letter!
I agree with Div that your letter was short but sweet.Its concise and to the point.
However, I think your application letter can be more personalised as I feel that some points have been stated in your resume already. For example,you can elaborate like "organized files and verified financial accounts"... so..
Anway,good job!
Cheers,
Serene
hi Gwen,
spelling mistakes>
1)As a fast leaner ---fast learner?
i think that you had done a great job when you link the job's requirement to your experience.
Good job=)
Cheers,
Shi Ting
PS: thanks for your comment on my blog post.
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